Crybaby Re-Told

Telling a story with rearranged song lyrics is a cool idea! However at some points your story is a bit hard to follow. Reading your description of the plot helps, but, like you said, adding visuals to help convey the plot would be helpful. For example, I don't understand the "tag, you're it" part. Was this when the boyfriend starts attacking her for what she did?

This is a really cool idea. I agree with Everi that I didn't quite get the whole story from your song until I read the description. Also, like you said, if you had more time it might be nice to work on the song transitions. Overall, though, this is super creative and I think you chose a very interesting medium for creating a new story.