To help a viewer seeing this for the first time, it would be great to include the source materials or a link to the previous photography project where someone could see the reference images.
The human motion is clear for the lines, but the movement version is not as successful. The dots around the knees, arms don't emphasize motion as much as look like shadows. The blocked shapes in the upper torso look unplaced and awkward.
The emotion dots version is not clearly legible. It only becomes clear as shapes are added. This is a great opportunity to experiment with symbolic representation rather than literal recreation of the source image. Experimentation with more abstract interpretations could really have helped this piece.
The man made structure works the best out of all the pieces in both the dots and shaped versions.
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Ariel Tian
Posted on 2014-12-02 09:40:57 -0500.
Your last four compositions were right on the spot, nice job! The only bit of critique I have is for your second composition (human in motion with shapes). I think some of the techniques you used from your first composition (ex. parallel lines to represent the legs) could have carried over into this composition.
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Anna Tan
Posted on 2014-12-02 09:44:33 -0500.
In your compositions for a human in motion, I preferred the one with lines and dots only as well. I think the varied directions of the lines provide movement to the composition and also make the composition more balanced. The weight and depth of the person are more apparent. The one with shapes, on the other hand, feels more static. I would like to see you try to create more perspective in the shape composition by overlapping shapes and placing shapes more strategically. I think you do that very well in the composition with shapes for human emotion; the tie is brought to the foreground by using the bold shapes and the sofa feels more solid. I agree with you that the shape composition for human emotion is more balanced, as the dots seem to be contained by the addition of shapes rather than flowing around freely.
To help a viewer seeing this for the first time, it would be great to include the source materials or a link to the previous photography project where someone could see the reference images.
The human motion is clear for the lines, but the movement version is not as successful. The dots around the knees, arms don't emphasize motion as much as look like shadows. The blocked shapes in the upper torso look unplaced and awkward.
The emotion dots version is not clearly legible. It only becomes clear as shapes are added. This is a great opportunity to experiment with symbolic representation rather than literal recreation of the source image. Experimentation with more abstract interpretations could really have helped this piece.
The man made structure works the best out of all the pieces in both the dots and shaped versions.
Your last four compositions were right on the spot, nice job! The only bit of critique I have is for your second composition (human in motion with shapes). I think some of the techniques you used from your first composition (ex. parallel lines to represent the legs) could have carried over into this composition.
In your compositions for a human in motion, I preferred the one with lines and dots only as well. I think the varied directions of the lines provide movement to the composition and also make the composition more balanced. The weight and depth of the person are more apparent. The one with shapes, on the other hand, feels more static. I would like to see you try to create more perspective in the shape composition by overlapping shapes and placing shapes more strategically. I think you do that very well in the composition with shapes for human emotion; the tie is brought to the foreground by using the bold shapes and the sofa feels more solid. I agree with you that the shape composition for human emotion is more balanced, as the dots seem to be contained by the addition of shapes rather than flowing around freely.
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