So, I think that you achieved your goal of making a funny video; after watching several clips I was amused at how unrelated they seemed. I don't, however, think this formed a coherent story. The first clips with the ambulance and the uniform wearing people looking upward to see Trinity jump out of a window at least had connectable actions leading into one another, but from that point on the video just seemed very random. The problem for me was, seeing those first two clips link together I assumed the video was going to have a semi-coherent story. If you were to do this again, I think you should pick one side or the other; either makes the video very random with no flow between the clips, or try to make at least a somewhat coherent story with the clips.
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ashleyle
Posted on 2015-11-09 23:33:37 -0500.
Hello!
I actually laughed out loud during some parts of the video, but primarily because the transitions were rather abrupt and the whole composition seemed really random, which I don't think was your intended outcome. I think if you were trying to create an action narrative, it would make the whole work more coherent if you incorporated more fluid transitions by adjusting the lighting/applying filters and established a central conflict/pacing.
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Fred Qiao
Posted on 2015-11-10 07:39:27 -0500.
Thank you for your suggestions guys. Very helpful. I edited the video again.
So, I think that you achieved your goal of making a funny video; after watching several clips I was amused at how unrelated they seemed. I don't, however, think this formed a coherent story. The first clips with the ambulance and the uniform wearing people looking upward to see Trinity jump out of a window at least had connectable actions leading into one another, but from that point on the video just seemed very random. The problem for me was, seeing those first two clips link together I assumed the video was going to have a semi-coherent story. If you were to do this again, I think you should pick one side or the other; either makes the video very random with no flow between the clips, or try to make at least a somewhat coherent story with the clips.
Hello!
I actually laughed out loud during some parts of the video, but primarily because the transitions were rather abrupt and the whole composition seemed really random, which I don't think was your intended outcome. I think if you were trying to create an action narrative, it would make the whole work more coherent if you incorporated more fluid transitions by adjusting the lighting/applying filters and established a central conflict/pacing.
Thank you for your suggestions guys. Very helpful. I edited the video again.
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