November 17th, 2014
The chatter sounds in the background and the dice really help create the bar atmosphere. It really sounds like a recording men talking in busy setting.
I agree that you did well in achieving the atmosphere you wanted, and thus the voice is that much more interesting to listen to.
It is very interesting to listen to. I really like how you add the sound of the dice and sound of clapping hands. It makes the listener more engaged and focused. But I think the ending is a little bit too abrupt, since I was expecting there might be something more and it suddenly stopped, maybe you should extend the background noise and fade it out to make it end more smoothly.
@Dan Cheng The ending comment... so obvious in hindsight! That's definitely something to look at. It makes a lot of sense, especially considering the way the piece fades in after chatter. Obviously I focused too much on the beginning.
The chatter in the background is really well done. Your voice in the foreground, however, sounds like it has been layered on, as opposed to being a part of the 'bar'. Consider perhaps a little more reverb on your voice?
I commented on Macro, King Lear, and Malloc.
The chatter and the sound effects were perfectly timed, and this piece very much reminded me of a radio play from the golden age of radio. If you decided to incoporate not even notes but maybe a rhythmic beat, this could come off sounding like a funny radio story such as you'd find on NPR or other such stations.
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