Severus and Stone

I really like your movie narrative, pretty much spot on what I would expect of a music video from that song. The thing about this song is the narrative. Rather than having a memorable beat or tune, it encases a touching narrative into its body and that is what sets it apart from others and it looks like that is the part of the song you want to showcase in your composition. However, I think it might be best if you go for one elaborate image of the song rather than making a comic strip to show the story. I'm not sure how detailed the comic would be but a narrative like this one deserves a level of complexity that might be hard-pressed for you to draw out in just the next few days.

Having 1 image to represent this narrative seems like a better fit to me because that is what narratives usually have. Whether in novel form, or films, or games, they usually have a cover photo, representative of the content and narrative inside it. So having a sort of cover photo for this song is a good idea. Your idea for that 1 photo actually seems like a good fit. It teases you enough about the narrative but doesn't give away too much. So subject matter-wise, you have it down. At this point, you are going to want to think about how to draw them to evoke the exact feelings you want. What sort of shapes, elements and techniques that we have used thus far in the class would best bring them out?

I think this is great. I listened to the song while following your story and I really felt the emotions. I wish you had time to actually create the video, and I encourage you to actually film this sometime in the future! I like the idea of a short comic, and you can basically make it a slideshow that goes with the music (like a storyboard for what the video could have been without the time constraint). Good luck!

This song obviously has a very strong emotional impact, and I think its really great that you could flesh out an entire detailed narrative based on it. I agree with Rikky, I feel that one image might be all you can realistically do in the time we have, but I'm sure when you translate all of your narrative points into visual elements they could be very powerful. Can you give us more detail about the colors or shapes you will be using?

I think I'm going to condense it to a triptych. The center panel would be shades of gray, featuring the haloed sick brother with winter trees to either side and a snowy landscape. I might do something with the footprints at the bottom of that one. The left side would be warm orange and brown: the firelit cabin scene, probably with the two brothers in bed. The right side would be mostly blue, with the younger brother standing against the sky in the morning.

Wow, I think that sounds like a very clear way to condense down your original. I think those panels will give a clear idea of loss, and leave the viewers to draw their own conclusions about what happens in between the frames. I can't wait to see it! I think it would be interesting to consider the empty/fullness that possible in each frame, for example, the first frame when its warm and in the cabin would be closer to the brothers, with lots of household clutter and blankets, vs the last frame, where the view might be farther out with the brother the only object in the frame besides the sky. It might help create that feeling of loss. Just something to consider. Can't wait to see the finished product!