Fix You

I really love the background and the colors in it, but to go off of what Daragh said in class about incorporating the foreground and background, I think it might help to change the direction of the 'flowey' stuff in the background. Since you are trying to lead the viewer up, I think it might help to make the eye go from the bottom left to the top right in an upwards direction matching the foreground lines. Right now, since they are going from the top left to the bottom right, I think it might be drawing the eye down. Just something you could experiment with to see if it helped achieve what you are looking for.

I like the thoughts that went into this piece, but I agree with Laura that the eye is being drawn down, not up as you wanted. Because the circles were so large and dark, the eye is being drawn there first and is being pulled down, the opposite way that you wanted. I think part of the reason for this is that in your background, the bottom half is made up of darker colors than the top half, so the eye is drawn down, and because the squiggles are horizontal, the eye stays down at the bottom instead of being drawn back up. I think you could try changing the direction of the squiggles in the background to be more diagonal towards the top-right, and to make the color gradient follow that pattern as well, in order to try to draw the eye in the intended direction.

I agree with both Amanda and Laura about the eye inadvertently being drawn downward, rather than upward, due to the motion of the squiggles in the background. I also think the light lines appearing both under and above the stable platforms cancel each other out, so it does not make the platforms appear as though they are moving upward like you wanted them to. I think that if you got rid of the light lines above the platforms and added a few more lines under them that slowly got lighter, it would create more of an upwards motion. But I think the shapes that you chose to employ are really great and your idea behind how to represent the song is really strong. If you could just make the movement upwards more apparent, the piece would be really strong.

The point about the eye being drawn upwards than downwards is very valid, but then I think that is something that can very easily be changed using a slightly different color palette and varying the thicknesses of your lines a little more. I think the fact that your line weights are all equal is something that could easily be changed and help affect the composition of your entire piece. Another thing that may help you is perhaps using a juxtaposition of order and chaos on the top and bottom to help you create the effect you want. The shapes above the lines would be an ideal place to do this, and you have many levers available to you to do this, the coloring of the multiple shapes, perhaps a smooth, logical gradient from cold to warm for order, or all over the spectrum and having many darker colors for chaos. ordering and consistency of shapes is also a factor.

I think the changes you made integrated our feedback very well, and your final piece moves the eye in the direction that you intended exactly; great job incorporating that! I think that the ideas that you had were integrated really well in the final piece, and all of your representations are consistent. I really like that you also made the final destination of "home" a lot more noticeable, ethereal, and idealistic by adding the halo effect; it adds a lot of contrast and draws the eye well. Great job constructing your vision into a finalized piece!

I found the differences between your initial work and your final work to be rather interesting. While your initial work is pretty interesting too, reading the previous comments, its flaws become more apparent. Your final piece, to me, is a nice example of how iterative design can improve a work. All in all, I think I agree with Amanda; you've incorporated feedback very well!

Moving onto your final piece, from my limited understanding, I quite liked it. It ends up doing exactly what you seem to want it to. Adding a glow around your largest circle was an ingenious move. Besides drawing a viewer's eyes upwards, it also ends up adding this interesting new vibe to your piece by being something that none of the other shapes are doing. I also liked your background colour choice. Fix You is one of my favourite songs, and in all honesty, the colours I associate with the song are exactly what you seem to have captured!

I really liked your initial piece, and I am amazed that you were able to improve upon it so much! I think you did a really good job of changing the background and and enhancing the colors so that the impact was more uplifting and soft. I think the glow you added around the final circle really helps draw the readers eye up a crossed the piece, which helps create a sense of movement and progress. I think you did an excellent job of creating a piece for the song you chose, and I think they really match!

Christina, I absolutely love the changes you made. The background is much clearer and blends in well with your shapes, and I love the soft edges of the "home" circles. They remind me of Kandinsky very much. Excellent job!

I love this piece. I think the changes you've made are perfect and do a really great job at conveying the overall tone and lyrics of the song. I really like how you changed the movement of the squiggles in the background, so that it subtly shifts your eyes closer to the circle. I also think the shift in blue to yellow as the background gets closer to the circle is a really good choice. Additionally, I think the half circles and triangles under the platforms are a really nice touch, because it makes the platforms feel as though they are being pulled down.

However, it appears as those triangles under the platforms have the same weight as the shapes above them. I think if you made those triangles lighter, like you did with the half circles, it would make the piece seem stronger because it would help to convey the idea that something is trying to pull you down, but you're still being lifted up, back to "home."

But I love almost everything about this piece. I think you've done an incredible job representing "Fix You" and your composition really does reflect the soft and serious, but overall warm, feeling of the song.

The use of color and composition to create that uplifting feeling you were going for really improved in your final piece. Changing the lines in the background really helped it stop feeling chaotic all the way through, and really helped it be more of a progression and a gradient. I think that adding more of the lines and shape segments as you did allowed you more control over their positioning and their flow. the subtle shadows on the two top circles really do draw the eye upwards and keep it there. All in all, there was marked improvement which led to a fantastic piece that incorporated both the feedback we gave you and your own ideas.